the truth with in

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by starfly (99956) on Thursday, 19-Jan-2012 14:44:42

My lover stayed away, my heart wonder's did she play, I wonder how much did the kitty come out to play. Did she let this dude play in the sea of heavenly obbis, how many sweet kisses did he get that I missed. My heart stands poised to run, if my lover has told me a lie, how much this guy, got to play in her heavenly sky. Though there will bee tears, seeds of fears with in me, I need to know how many times the kitty came out to play.

Post 2 by Remy (I've now got the silver prolific poster award! wahoo!) on Friday, 20-Jan-2012 16:04:41

Well that was certainly interesting. it brings to the surface some interesting emotions. My only qualm is you used play twice in two lines. It was a bit much. The repitition of "Kitty come out to play" worked nicely though.